I feel like Dr. Frankenstein

I had to save it.

It was a good scene, hot as hell. Too hot. Hot but pointless. So I took it apart, line by line, threw out the ones that didn't serve and crafted new ones. I poured cold water on the lovers, retarded their spark and made the waiting serve the story.

Ding.

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